Not a poem . . .
I know I shouldn't be putting this on forums, as I intend to submit it to a contest - but who the hale is going to notice dera cymreiges with a thing called 'not a poem'. Ha ha!-------------------Any...
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I'll go over it again, but so far I wouldn't suggest any change. Good luck Carly. I will delete it in a weeks time if you wish!!!
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A week is about what it needs really - we'll leave up here waving from the flagpole and see who salutes it.Then we'll haul her down, fold her up and present her to the contest editors. They'll either...
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I salute, I salute!maybe:"Downright violence was no longer a part of her nature, in recent years." could better be:"Downright violence was, recently - no longer part of her nature."crimes of...
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Thanks Sal - I'm kinda' proud of it.Yep - we Canucks say 'home invasion' - it's a buzz phrase.Home invasion is a problem here - burglars tie people up and stuff like that.I'll keep your tips in...
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I thought this was great. I love the idea of an acrostic story and you did so well with it. You made it seem a simple task but I know it wasn't. That's one heck of an old lady, Alley Burton.
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Thanks all. I think I will have to tighten some of my sentences. I've done a lot of stuff on Alley Burton lately - I've just been letting her fall onto my page. The writings will likely end up as 3...
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